Hands – A Microstory (Yeah Write#282)

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The War was over.

Yesterday’s final minutes became irrelevant for you when your time stopped ticking. Cold hands, grasped tightly around my own, lost their strength and in that final moment sank to your sides.

The battle you had fought was finally lost. Age had won.

 

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About Donna-Louise Bishop

I'm a freelance reporter and creative writing tutor living in the beautiful county of Norfolk UK. I blog. Wife to Ben, mummy of two young boys. Cake rocks.
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17 Responses to Hands – A Microstory (Yeah Write#282)

  1. d3athlily says:

    Ohhh how sad and relatable, Donna. So glad to see you on the grids! We missed you. 💖

  2. Oh Donna-Loiuse! This is so beautifully written. Well done and welcome back 🙂

  3. Shailaja V says:

    Gut wrenching, sad but oh so real. I could hear the sadness in this piece, actually hear it.

  4. Lisa Shaw says:

    Lovely, sad, touching. These are all the words that come to mind. Well done, Donna-Louise.

  5. This is not a direction my mind went when thinking of “war,” but yes, so appropriate.

  6. hemasmixedbag says:

    I loved how you talked about death of a loved one with “Cold hands grasped tightly around my own”. This one was beautiful!

  7. innatejames says:

    Putting the reader in the drivers seat with the first person POV was a smart choice. If this is based on truth (because it feels like it is), I’m sorry for your loss.

    • Donna-Louise Bishop says:

      Thanks Nate. I thought the prompt was really well thought out for this microstory challenge. It could be taken so many places. I hope this speaks to others who are coping with loss too.

  8. Donna-Louise Bishop says:

    Sorry! Gremlins posted the same comment I posted for someone else… odd!

    Thanks for taking the time to read and comment 🙂

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